Sunday, May 8, 2011

Show versus tell

I'm going back through the completed manuscript of the Time Keeper's Daughter now to eradicate those evil moments where I'm telling, telling, telling instead of sucking the reader right down into the action to live it with my characters.

I want you to smell Eddie's cologne the way Annie does when she first meets him, not just know he's wearing it. I want you to plunge into that first love attraction that makes two gallons of Abercrombe scent taste like a promise of long, sweet kisses.

It's amazing how often we tell, tell, tell when we could just show.